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5. In many countries, the quality of life in large cities is becoming worse. What are the causes for this problem? What measures do you think should be taken to tackle the problem?

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The living standard of
people
 around the globe has been affected severely especially in big
cities
. There are numerous reasons which are creating
this
 problem. And, I will discuss
this
 in the following paragraphs along with the solutions to overcome these problems.
To begin
 with, there are a variety of reasons which affect the living standard of a person in a metropolitan city.
Firstly
, the eating habits
people
 are having in these large
cities
 are very poor and it defines a lot about their health and quality of
life
 they are spending in comparison to
people
 living in small towns.
Secondly
,
people
 in
such
cities
 are so busy that they do not have time to spend with their loved ones and which leads to many problems
such
 as anxiety, depression and many more.
For instance
, asking someone living in a small town the reason behind his free spirit is always answered as devoting his or her time with their loved ones.
Hence
, the quality of
life
 has become worse in metropolitan
cities
 due to the above-mentioned reasons. The solution to tackle
this
 problem is,
first
 and foremost is to indulge
people
 in physical activities and making them come out of their enclosed spaces and make them realise that there are more things to
life
 than work.
Also
, making them aware of the societal issues which are being faced by individuals in their surroundings so that they can come up and help those who are in need. And, as a
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result a human will find inner peace by helping others and
this
 can help in improving the standard of
life
 they are going through. To conclude, I would say that a man's living standard totally depends on the way he is leading his
life
 along with the amount of pressure he is taking to fulfil the tasks of his day to day
life
. And, it can be improved by doing tasks that involve personal care.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Overpopulation
  • Infrastructure
  • Pollution
  • Housing shortages
  • Rental and property prices
  • Traffic congestion
  • Public transportation
  • Deforestation
  • Urban sprawl
  • Mental health
  • Economic disparity
  • Waste management
  • Environmental impact
  • Public health
  • Recreational areas
  • Wealth gap
  • Cost of living
  • Lifestyle
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