In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by adult. What is your opinion about this ?

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the number of
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drastically increasing
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all around the world especially in developed
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countries
like America.In my point of view banning
yungsters
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youngsters
to go out of their house after the dusk or they have to be with their guardians is a great idea to prevent many
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acivities
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activities
in cities.
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will discuss the
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advantages
and disadvantages of
this
act in
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states
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of America. On the
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open
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,people do have the full right to live their lives as they like, which means no
one
will
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interfere
with anyone
life
even their parents.
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although
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have
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strict law and order there are vast
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in past years, in the some of them came to know by the public and police at the same time
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there are many negative
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unlawful activities,because of their immature personality,peer group
influenece
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influence
as well as the usage of drugs and alcohol.
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be figured out.There is
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the teenager would suffer the stage of depression and anxiety.
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it may end up with assault with parents
then
it would lead to
further
crimes
inside the home itself.
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months back I read a famous
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highlighted the news of a murder.Very sadly I read the matter that son killed his mother due to some silly conflicts
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due to the restriction for going out after a particular time,the youngsters may become depend always with
one
parent. To conclude,in my perspective,the US government must conduct some awareness camps regarding the night
crimes
for the younger citizens and residents to avoid future
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complications
in their
life
.People
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should
keep an equilibrium in their
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excellent flow in
life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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