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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

#countries #people #work #travel #year #school #university #studies
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it has become a quite common vogue among the youngsters to start working or travelling abroad for a
year
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 after completing their high school and before pursuing a
university
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degree
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 just to enhance their skills and gaining valuable experience.
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 trend and correspondingly, it will highlight my opinion in the conclusion. To open the deliberation, there are myriad of reasons that can be favoured the statement. The
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 tenable aetiology is financial independence and
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 growth.
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, students are encouraged to start
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 after finishing their secondary education so that they can pay their
university
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 fees and bear the personal day to day expenses. Whereas, visiting several places after schooling will
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 help young people to attain social knowledge and ,
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 it will improve their communication skills. Apparently, they learn to deal with inevitable challenges and problems which happened in their lives and surroundings.
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, several
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 have proven that pupils with prior
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 experience and global exposure made them self confidence and it increases self-esteem. It would be beneficial for their
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 graph. Despite having the aforementioned advantages there are disadvantages too. Starting
work
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 after finishing school or having a
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 gap have some drawbacks as young people start thinking that a
university
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degree
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 is neither mandatory nor important for getting a job.
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, they never complete their education. When they paid off well for their
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 eventually, they will give not give significance to the
studies
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. Unfortunately, it is impossible to find a reputed job or to build a successful
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 without having a good academic qualification. To exemplify, Many multinational companies do not accept the resume of candidates who are not holding a
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degree
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. Needless to say, a gap
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 can seriously affect students
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 who lose their focus on
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. To recapitulate,
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 working just after finishing primary education or taking a
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 gap for exposure to the world have many pros still, it has some cons as it may ruin their
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 growth and make them less interested in
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.
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, In my opine students should have complete their graduation
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 before starting
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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