108.Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
It is argued that an increasing number of
individuals
choose to work
for themselves, rather than work
for other companies. This
essay would argue that the main reason for this
is that people
feel more free when they are self-employed, while
the main drawbacks are high risk and stress.
On the one hand, people
who have their own businesses have more liberty. This
is because when individuals
work
for others, they need to follow rules. But if they are self-employed, they do not need to listen to what others ask them to do, instead
, they are the ones who tell others what they need to do. Also
, people
are more free because they can work
from where they want and when they want. For example
, normally freelancers of big companies do not go to work
every day, only when there is something urgent or to ensure that everything is in order, while
the other time, they can do other activities.
On the other hand
, self-employed people
are more exhausted. The high competition in the market, makes people
worry about their business since they are not sure if it will succeed or not, also
, they need to look for solutions if there are any problems. Furthermore
becoming a freelancer is very risky. This
is because individuals
need to invest a large amount of money to create their businesses. People
can go bankrupt if the company does not work
well, and they lose everything they invested. For instance
, many people
who had had a successful business, fell into bankruptcy from one day to another, losing everything they had and having a large amount of debts that they needed to pay.
In conclusion, individuals
prefer to be freelancers because they are freer, although
there are drawbacks such
as high-risk rates and people
being more exhausted.Submitted by elenazheng1211 on
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