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Establishing good relationships in the work place is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work

Some
people
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 believe having a good relationship with a co-worker is very important to
work
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 in the
company
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, while others say it is not mastery to
work
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 at the workplace.
This
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 essay will discuss both sides. On the one hand, Many workers believe having friends in the
company
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 is very positive to
work
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 together.
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, if
people
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 have to
work
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 with the team, they have to be good associates to make the
work
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 come out smoothly, because they have to argue with a co-worker about the project easier more than
people
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 who do not care about having a relationship in the
company
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, and
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 it make
work
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 to the same direction that the worker wants.
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, the college can advise and help with the project.
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, if you have a problem or can not produce productive
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, they can help with the
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 think that it is not the main factor in having friends in the office. It is more comfortable than working with other
people
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 because they are not concerned about when they have different
ideas
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, and do not worry about having a conflict.
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,
people
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 can put any
ideas
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 in their
work
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.
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, many
people
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 have many
ideas
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,
people
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 can not put their own
ideas
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 into the project and they have to accept different
ideas
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 from their colleagues. In conclusion,
although
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 having friends in the workplace is the main factor for working in the
company
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, Some
people
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 think it is not the key to working.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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