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Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?

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While there are a huge number of benefits not to allow
children
 to go to
school
 at the age of six or seven and encourage them to have fun at home, there are
also
 many people, which claim that
school
 attendance by youngers as early as possible is of paramount importance.
Although
 I believe that both approaches have a positive impact on
school age
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children
, I am going to analyze only the benefits of going to
school
 from a young age in
this
 essay. There is some evidence that countless
children
 have been positively influenced by early going to
school
.
This
 might happen because
children
 with dissimilar background and level of preschool knowledge collaborate with each other on a syllabus whereas other peers, who have been playing at home, frequently stay in their comfort zone at the same development level. Mostly, the sooner
children
 start interacting with unfamiliar same ages, the faster they may enrich each other with new skills and habits.
Therefore
,
children
 with the greatest number of opportunities to communicate with peers have advantages over the
children
, who have the ability to interact with extended family. Another benefit to be taught at
school
 as soon as possible is the possibility to show
children
’s personality and either develop or correct it sooner.
Although
 the majority of the parents try to do their best to enhance
children
’s imagination and willingness to be useful for society, teachers and psychologists often have
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 vision and extended experience how to do that in more effective ways which is helpful for
further
 development. In conclusion, even though many parents strive to stay their
children
 and home as much as possible, I think
children
 should be encouraged by parents to attend
school
 at six or earlier.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socialization
  • peer interaction
  • academic foundation
  • literacy
  • numeracy
  • structured environment
  • discipline
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • acceptance
  • educational resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • learning experience
  • early identification
  • learning disabilities
  • intervention
  • support
  • assistance
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