Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree.

Research on finding the treatment costs an enormous amount to the authorities so it is advisable that it is better to
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prevent it
prevent
on an earlies stage. I strongly agree with
this
because
medicines
for some dreadful diseases are
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extremely
costly and research require expensive chemicals and professionals .
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,
medicines
for
such
diseases costly and difficult to buy. Every government has a certain fixed amount for medical emergencies. They have to save
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for other emergencies too. If any natural calamity
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,
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amount will be required. In
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of
spread
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of
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disease,
population
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will require a huge
quanity
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quantity
of
medicines
. To buy these
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medicines
for people,
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will require
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huge funds.
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, due to Covid, every nation required
medicines
to treat
this
so to save nations from
this
, every nation advised their population to use
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and
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hygienic
safety so that less number of people catch
this
disease.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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