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THE NUMBER OF CHILDREN THAT READ BOOKS FOR FUN HAS DROPPED DRAMATICALLY IN RECENT YEARS. WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS? HOW WE ENCOURAGE CHILDREN TO READ MORE?

In today's world,
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 and
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 children like reading
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 for fun and prefer to spend
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 time in a different way.
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, it will analyse what can be made to change the situation.
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 with, it can be clearly observed that the main cause of a
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decreased
 number of infants who read
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 rapid popularisation of technologies.
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 is because of the fact that not only do not phones require concentration and attention which is obligatory for reading but
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 the major part of youngsters have become
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 to gadgets.
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, their daily routine consists of computers, mobiles, headphones but
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books
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 since they consider them to be boring.
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, recent research has shown that the number of child
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 being sold in shops has fallen by 20% compared to the
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,
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 issue can be solved by a variety of measures and one of them is the implementation of changes in the
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 literature programme.
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 is due to the fact that not only are children's habits
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structured
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 but
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because
 not interesting novels may discourage children from trying something new.
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, if the government takes it seriously and changes the list of obligatory literature being taught at
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 it may
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increase
 the interest of students in paper
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.
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, one study has illustrated that 20% of
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 covered in
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 are old-fashioned and have completely irrelevant ideas. Eventually, to conclude, the major reason for the fact that the number of
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children
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who
 read
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 for fun has dropped considerably is that there is a huge popularisation of technologies
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and
 phone use. Despite
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, one possible
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 for solving
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 issue is to make changes to the
school
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 literature programme.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proliferation
  • Screen-based entertainment
  • Deprioritizing
  • Storytelling
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Underfunded
  • Affordability
  • Curriculums
  • Foster
  • Digital-native generation
  • Gamify
  • Community-driven
  • Diverse collection
  • Milestones
  • Incentivize
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