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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Today, many countries are facing the same problem. The issue is that the increasing number of
people
 that suffer from illnesses caused by the tendency of eating
junk
food
.
Therefore
, the governments consider
to put
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higher
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tax
 on
this
 sort of
food
. So, in
this
 essay, I would like to explain the reasons why I support
this
 action as well as provide a plausible conclusion regarding that matter.
To begin
 with, as we have known that the
problems
 followed by the
tendecy
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tendency
 of eating
junk
food
 are
the
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health
problems
,
such
 as obesity and diabetes. Those
problems
 actually push the government to give a lot of
money
 to treat them well.
However
, after decades, the public
money
 that uses to treat the patients are getting insufficient.
Thus
, the higher
tax
 that the official imposes
to
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the
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junk
food
 restaurants can help
it
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to cure those things.
For instance
, we can take an example
for
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 the
ciggarette
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cigarette
 industries in Indonesia. They must pay
certain
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 amount of
money
 to cover up the costs of health
problems
 caused by them.
Hence
, the official can alter
the
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public
money
 to other important matters (e.g education or infrastructure).
Secondly
, another good reason is that when the
tax
 is getting higher, the cost of
the
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junk
food
 is
also
 getting expensive.
This
 occurrence can lower the frequency of
people
 eating that kind of
food
.
Nevertheless
,
this
 situation might be accompanied by the spreading of healthy restaurants,
for instance
, salad-on-the-go in Indonesia, so that,
people
 can alter their eating preference.
As a result
,
this
 would reduce the number of obesity cases in a particular country which means that
people
 are getting aware of their
food
 and
soon
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,
this
 method can bring them to live
the
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 healthy lifestyle. In a nutshell, imposing
higher
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a higher
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tax
to
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junk
food
 restaurant is a nice solution to encounter the health issues that they caused. That
money
 can be used to treat the patients and lowering the frequency to consume it.
Hence
, in the end, I would reiterate my belief that I really agree with that notion.
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