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Discussion the reason why people define happiness differently and how to obtain happine

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Happiness
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 is considered
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the fundamental goal of humans, yet it is one of the most difficult aspects of
life
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 to quantify. The Standard of
happiness
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 is evaluated in many ways, connected to various aspects of
life
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. But overall, according to three research, material and non-material
conditions
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 are the two main groups that determine
happiness
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. The material condition relates to all physical elements
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 as finance as well as the
environment
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. Money is the key factor to support
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that is
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 the reason why an adequate financial condition is vital for
happiness
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. Correspondingly, both researchers Gross National
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 and
World
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Happiness
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 Ranking consider finance element, specifically GDP and sustainable socio-economic development,
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 the pillar contributing to a happy
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. The
World
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Happiness
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 Ranking
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 shows that the top ten of indexes are prosperous countries namely The Netherlands, Switzerland, Sweden, and so on.
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, nations in economic turmoil like Sudan, Venezuela, ... are the least happy countries.
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 that, the
environment
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 is instrumental in a happy
life
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. According to Gross National
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, Bhutan- the happiest country in the
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 has policies that not only meet the development demand of villagers but
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 accentuate the need to protect and preserve the
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 and forest cover. It is no doubt that a clean
environment
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 makes good
conditions
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 for human physical and mental health. Another important factor
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happiness
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 is non-material
conditions
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 referring to spiritual elements, namely governance, freedom, or relationship. The governance of each country plays a vital role in the
happiness
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 of its inhabitants. Due to the
World
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happiness
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 report, Finland- a nation which is well-known for great subsidy policies and low population- has topped the index of
happiness
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 nation twice.
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, population-dense countries like the United States, Egypt, and India dramatically fall in
happiness
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 rank. It is conspicuous that policies
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 as social assistance and family planning have a significant effect on the
happiness
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 of each country.
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, freedom is
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a factor that significantly affects a happy
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. Specifically, the most common regret of
people
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 is that they do not live a
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 true to themselves, even most
people
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 had not
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 even a half of their dreams. According to the research about the top five regrets of dying, one wish participants have is that they should have kept in touch with their friend. These concerns have not brought joy but created a deep regret in their lives.
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, Meik Wiking, CEO of think tank The
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 Research Institute in Copenhagen, Denmark, who took part in the
World
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happiness
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 report said that
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 "The divide between rich and poor
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 creates an erosion of the cohesion and trust between
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, which is so vital for the feeling of safety and security and
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 for the overall
happiness
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 level of the American
people
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". From the previous evidence relationships in a society deeply affect the spiritual
life
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, especially the joy of each person. In conclusion, the word
happiness
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 can be determined in various ways but in general, it can be evaluated not only by material aspects but
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 non-material
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 which refer to spiritual elements. A happy
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 only takes place when both material and spiritual development occurs side by side to complement and reinforce each other.
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