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Teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their communities. This is good for the individuals concerned and society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Discuss, based on your own knowledge and experience

#teenagers #work #communities #individuals #society
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Some
people
 say that volunteering in
teen
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 years should be compulsory in a person’s life. Some
people
 think
that is
 a good thing for
teenagers
 to do and for the entire
society
. I agree that service
work
 is good in general for
people
 to understand the role of a person in
society
 and to broaden personal.
Firstly
, when
teenagers
 do service
work
 they are doing something apparently for others but
also
 for themselves. For young
people
, these valuable and practical experiences help them to learn about themselves. Doing volunteering
work
 may take them outside their comfort zone and expose them to
people
 of different ages and various backgrounds.
Furthermore
, volunteering can help teens expand their understanding of certain aspects of
society
.
For example
,social
work
 could eliminate their possible preconceptions of marginalised
people
,
such
 as
homeless
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, immigrants, the disabled or the elderly and all the difficulties that they confront. Working face-to-face with these
people
 could help
teenagers
 develop a different point of view and become more mature and
open minded
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. Even volunteer
work
 with no personal contact,
such
 as cleaning the environment or recycling trash, helps
teenagers
 feel good about working for nothing. In conclusion,
although
 unpaid
work
 is not mandatory for
teenagers
, being exposed to different realities and doing something concrete could be beneficial for young
people
 and for
society
 in general.
Therefore
, I believe that
this
 idea should be promoted.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unpaid work
  • Community service
  • Individuals
  • Society
  • Responsibility
  • Empathy
  • Valuable skills
  • Experiences
  • Strong community
  • Well-being
  • Career opportunities
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