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Some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become more disciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Over recent years, the trend of adolescents opting for
work
 after school has witnessed a steep incline.
Although
 there is a popular belief that young adults who engage in tasks with monetary benefits are successful in their later stages of life, there are
also
 people who are of the opinion that youngsters need to have their rest
time
. The intention of
this
 article is to shed some light on both these ideologies. Perhaps the major advantage of youngsters working post their study
time
 is that they are able to relate the concepts learned at school in real-life. As the topics are fresh in their minds, it is easier for them to implement these into solving business problems.
For instance
, a computer science student working as a library assistant can easily help the library develop library management software.
Thus
, giving him a chance to actualise his learnings.
However
, utilising free
time
 to
work
 stems some negatives too. A common drawback is that young adults become distant from their parents. The hectic schedule in school and longer duration of working hours at part-
time
work
 results in a lack of quality
time
 with family.
As a result
, these youngsters lead a lonely life. An example of
this
 is the recent studies portraying the declining scores of the relationship index. Adolescents taking up tasks with financial advantages is gaining immense popularity.
This
 aids them in understanding and correlating ideas gained through education, whilst, leading them to a solitary lifestyle, if not balanced. My personal view is that young adults must take up opportunities to
work
 at early ages itself as the positives of
this
 outweigh the drawbacks.
Submitted by Hisham Musthafa on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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