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Living in a country where people have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems

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These days there is no doubt the importance of learning the common
language
 in different countries. some
people
 think when they living in a
country
 which speaks a foreign
language
 it will lead to a serious problem.In
this
 essay , I am going to discuss both views either positive or negative and draw my personal conclusion. In the term of the positive side , some
people
 think staying in a
country
 with a different
language
 is benefits for the person. The main reason is given to support
this
 claim is became adapted with the time to learn
this
 foreign
language
 daily from the native
people
.
Besides
 that ,making new friends is the most significant reason that encourages the person to learn faster the
language
 and knowing another culture.
Moreover
 , many
people
 believe it is not good to stay in a
country
 without learning their
language
 before so can cause serious social problems. For many ,reason I think it is a wrong idea due to when the person learn the common
language
 around the world like: English , the communication will be more effective and efficient lead to a decrease in a serious social problem.
Additonally
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Additionally
 , there is a misunderstanding but not a serious it will resolve if there a translater. In conclusion ,
although
 most of the
people
 who stay in a foreign
country
 either for working or studying if knowing become after time frustrated. In my
opinion
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 I believe that it is a good opportunity if their English is good.
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