Many governments spent a lot of money on art. Some people think that this investment in art is necessary, but others say the money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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of expenditure is done on
art
. While it is believed that
this
spending is fruitful, some argue that it is prudent to invest it
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education as well as
health
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sector.
However
, I believe that it is wise to spend money on the development of the former and the latter, for it will ensure
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longevity
longetivity
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of the
people
and will be responsible for the increase in the employment rate. There are a few good reasons to encourage
government
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to expend revenue on important areas,
such
as health and education
instead
of
art
forms. One of them is that it will improve the well-being of the citizens.
In other words
, they should spend on building hospitals and clinics where
people
can get treated either free of cost or at an economical price.
For instance
,
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occurrence
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of a disaster
such
as
tsunami
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a tsunami
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or floods gives rise to water-borne diseases amongst
people
, if health centres are pervasive in an area,
then
the disaster affected
people
can easily get themselves treated there. The other reason is, schools and colleges majorly focus on exam-driven curriculum, even though the number of graduates is increasing significantly, the unemployment rate is rising.
Therefore
, if the legislature
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on improving the quality of
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education
this
situation can be averted.
Although
it is not so important, some think it is vital to invest
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art
as it depicts the cultural heritage and creativity level of a country.
Moreover
, it is believed that
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it is the best way to flaunt the talent of a nation.
For example
, the more advance the
art
field in a region, the more one can compete with other nations.
In addition
, if more money is spent on establishing painting and dance institutes,
then
more
people
would participate in it.
Consequently
, talent will increase. In conclusion, though
government
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can motivate citizens to hone their
creativity
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skills and represent a country's culture by involving them in arts and crafts,
nevertheless
I reckon it is wiser to focus on building medical facilities and educational institutions to protect and educate humans.
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