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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some say that the media houses are being unreasonable with the high profile
people
 by bringing on the surface their private
movements
; whilst other say; popularity has its price and
that is
 compromised personal life. I believe that personal space is a basic human right and notable
stars
 must
also
 be able to choose, what they want to hide from the community. Celebrities can rarely enjoy personal
movements
 nowadays. Countless incidents have come to the light where actors or actresses having intimate
movements
 without their consent.
Moreover
, there are hardly any
movements
 in these
stars
 lives that have not been captured or reported and
this
 ignites a furious debate about the personal freedom of an individual. Paparazzi's and media outlets are earning enormous amounts of money and
this
 is the main reason the
practice
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 is being continued even though, seems unethical. In a survey by Forbes magazine, almost all showbiz models showed their unhappiness toward these sorts of practices and demanded legal actions to be taken against paparazzi.
On the other hand
, nothing comes free in life and the popularity has its price as well, the most notorious being the compromised privacy. Notable showbiz
stars
, sports players and politicians are considered wrongly, as public property and society are keen to know more about them and
this
 produces the threat of the compromised personal life. Even though some models have become viral by promoting their intimate and personal photos considering
this
 normal, but still a vast majority of
stars
 consider a lack of personal space, a hefty cost of fame. And rightly, many anchors have tried to educate the general public to discourage any
such
 practices that result in the compromised privacy of famous
people
. To conclude, the lack of privacy of famous
people
 might be considered ‘normal’ by the general public and some celebrities too, I believe, the personal lives of famous
people
 should stay personal and must not be disclosed to the community against their will.
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