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More people are stressed today than ever before. What are the causes of this stress? What can be done to address this problem ?

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It is undeniable that the amount of stress human is experiencing in today's world is higher than ever in the past.
This
 essay will examine the reasons for
this
 high level of stress and come up with a practical solution. One of the most important factors contributing to increasing the level of anxiety
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 is the power of social
media
. The speed of fast texting between teenagers and having
access
 to all kinds of data in a short period of time with no proper control and regulation is impacting our youth. In fact, if we compare the past generation with the new generation, it is clear that technology has put a lot of pressure on youngsters. It can be clearly seen that the number of young
people
 with mental health disorders is growing.
For instance
, depression among highschoolers has been doubled over the past decade according to the recent statistic done by youth and mental health teams in North America. Another reason for
this
 phenomenon lies in the fact that the global
population
 is growing and we are facing more poverty, famine, wars and all other outcomes of uncontrolled rise in
population
. So many
people
 are living in crowded places, some have no
access
 to health care or have a hard time finding a job.
Therefore
 all the above situations are stressful to mankind. To tackle
this
 problem, we need to work in two main areas.
First
 and foremost, regulate the use of social
media
 for the young generation. The government should have total control over the
media
 and ban some inappropriate social websites for teens
such
 as Houseparty, Instagram and Facebook.
People
 should be older than 18 to be able to have
access
 to those platforms.
Second
, the government should
also
 control
population
 growth but having solid family planning programs in some countries to avoid unemployment, poverty and homelessness as main factors for stress these days. Overall, to curb the number of anxiety
people
 is facing these days, all countries should be able to cooperate and regulate both social
media
access
 and
population
 growth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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