Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned. Discuss the main arguments for this statement and give your own opinion.
Blood
Correct your spelling
Bloodsports
sports
are increasing in the
certain areas of the world. These activities are cruel and should be banned completely globally. I strongly agree with Correct article usage
apply
this
banning because due to these
a Correct determiner usage
this
number
of animals
die and a sense of violence develop in the minds of spectators.
Firstly
, due to these cruel sports
a number
of animals
loss
their lives. There are certain blood Replace the word
lose
sports
in which animals
fight with each other. The powerful animal win in these games
. The one who killed the other animal on the ground is considered as
powerful so in the Change preposition
apply
game
one has to be killed. Add a comma
,game
These kind
of Change the determiner
This kind
These kinds
games
are played ubiquitously which is detrimental. Banning is the only solution. For instance
, bullfighting is one of such
sports
, every year a number
of bull die due to this
slaughter game. These games
should be completely banned to stop the slaughter.
Secondly
, these sports
are spreading violence globally. In these games
fightings happen between Add a comma
,games
animals
. They hit and hurt each other. A number
of animals
face major injuries while playing these games
. Those who watch these games
impacted by the violence. Children are vulnerable, they often watch these, they may practise same
fights at home. Correct article usage
the same
This
may cause severe accidents too. For example
, dogfighting is such
a violent game played worldwide which should be completely banned. If children watch these, their delicate minds will be impacted.
In conclusion, blood sports
should be banned. I strongly agree with this
opinion because these sports
cause killing of animals
and affect the delicate minds of people.Submitted by Priya on
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