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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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Many people think that
currently
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 we have numerous
options
 with regards to everything . I totally agree with
this
 notion because we get ample choices when we go for purchasing something .
This
 essay explains what are the number of
options
 with examples , followed by a reasoned conclusion. It is an undeniable fact that in present days we live in multi optional societies . In other ,words we have lots of varieties available in each and everything from the smallest things to the biggest things , cheaper to expensive price and so on . The
first
 reason is that globalisation which opens so many doors for us like our
life
 make us more materialistic . To illustrate
this
 , we get so many
options
 for choosing a school or college for our children from the local level to international level ,
also
 varieties in modes of transport from a motorcycle to a plane as well as we taste different cuisines of food in our home or city .
However
 ,
life
 becomes complex of because more distinctions , more confusions .
Furthermore
 , the internet brings so many preferences for us .
For instance
 , we buy branded clothes , home appliances , grocery items with just one click of a button on the web .
This
 makes
life
 so easy .
In addition
 to
this
 , we have ample choices for entertainment , travelling , leisure activities and so on .
Therefore
 , we have to just browse on the net and select our favourite and enjoy it .
Moreover
 , it has too many privileges for booking online hotel or ticket and payment opportunity, too .
Consequently
 ,
life
 becomes full of favourites. To conclude , I strongly agree with
this
 fact because it is very true these days because globalisation and the internet bring too many
options
 for us .
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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