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Some people sat that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Practical dexterity is considered a major success factor for
students
. Many people
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 an opinion that from initial level of education to higher studies, enormous
time
 is being given to
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knowledge
 and less
time
 to practice
skills
 experiences.
This
 essay agrees with the above statement. Though
theoritical
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theoretical
knowledge
 is essential for learning facts, it is not enough to gain
knowledge
 for any subject.
For example
, a computer science
student
, unless coding programs are not
practiced
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 on a machine,
student
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a student
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 might end up mugging up the programs, which is not good for his furthur career. If
students
 are not exposed
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 real-
time
knowledge
,
then
 they won`t have a clear idea
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 concepts are applied in real life.
For instance
, formulas of physics or chemistry, if they are explained with real-
time
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the student
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 can get a deep insight
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 the discipline. In short, practical
knowledge
 along with facts can shape the
students
 effectively.
Furthermore
,
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time
skills
 are beneficial for
students
 in many areas.
Firstly
, they can secure a decent job easily, as soon as they
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 their education. Those who won`t have real-
time
skills
, they are unclear about their career.
Secondly
, if practical
skills
 are taught from
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 level of education, it makes the
students
 visionary and innovative. A recent study illustrates, in Japan, many disciplines in schools are taught with its
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 n day-to-day life, which
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 the
students
 to be more extra-ordinary.
Therefore
, learning
skills
 if practised with
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 usage can nurture them smart and
also
 help them to get an excellent job. In conclusion, schools and universities must give an equal amount of
time
on
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 facts as well as
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 usage in real-
time
, which helps the
student
 in his career from the initial phase onwards.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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