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Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities world-wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interaction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view

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It is argued by some that the negative effect of the
internet
 on social
communication
 outweighs its advantage of developing new ways of global interaction.
This
 essay completely disagrees with that statement, mainly because the
internet
 has created a great number of new job opportunities and has enabled
long–distance
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communication
.
Firstly
, the
internet
 has undoubtedly changed the working market and created millions of new jobs,
thus
 helping
people
 from all over the world to support their family. Nowadays, in order to work for a big company,
people
 must not need to relocate and leave their family behind.
For example
, a software developer from
india
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India
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 can now work for a company like Google from his own house in
india
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India
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,
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apply
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 and communicate with his
colleuges
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colleagues
 from the US via the
internet
.
Secondly
, The
internet
 has enabled the
communication
 of
people
 from anywhere on the planet, no matter what is the distance between them. There are numerous types of social platforms in which
people
 can communicate and the only requirement is
internet
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an internet
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 connection.
For instance
, a young child from Israel can maintain a steady relationship with his grandmother who lives in
Austraila
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Australia
 by simply chatting with her daily via
Zoom
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the Zoom
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 application. Another example would be a young couple who was forced to live away from each other for a
peroid
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period
 of time and can now keep their relationship stable by
simlpy
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simply
 using
Skpe
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Skype
everyday
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every day
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. In conclusion, the
internet
 has transformed our way of global
communication
 and
although
 some may fear its negative impact on social interaction, In my
opinion
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 its
advantges
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advantages
such
 as the creation of new job and the comfort of easy
long distance
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long-distance
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communication
 outweighs its drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • digital platforms
  • face-to-face interactions
  • superficial relationships
  • cultural exchange
  • international relations
  • cyberbullying
  • misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • emotional connections
  • social stability
  • mental health
  • world-wide communication
  • social interaction
  • online interactions
  • instant messaging
  • social media
  • emails
  • virtual relationships
  • cross-cultural understanding
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