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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

#humans #environment #governments #address #people
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world population and economies, human beings have created enormous damages to the
environment
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. Throughout
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 essay, I will discuss some of these damages created by people as well as how
government
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 and citizen can ease the situation.
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 with, many production factories and increasing use of motor vehicles are powered by
combustion
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the combustion
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 of fossil fuels, which produced many harmful chemicals and pollutant gases during the burning process.
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, the
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 of consumer spending
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 rise the usage of
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 package material, it is undeniable that
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plastic
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 material will eventually turn into chemical harming the ecosystem.
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 should be responsible to monitor and implement certain regulation in order to address the environmental problem.
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, pollutant gas emissions from industries should be monitored closely and fine for exceeding the legal limit.
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, the
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 should encourage the citizen to use renewable power sources
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 as solar power and
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 vehicles. Alternatively,
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government
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 may improve the public transportation system and limiting the number of cars on the road by increasing
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 tax.
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,
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 bags or packing material should be banned
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 put on higher charges for usage.
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, more recycling facilities should be built nearby the residential building to encourage citizens to reprocess. Since the
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 may not be able
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 the actions of all individuals, it is very important for all of us to play a part to protect the
environment
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. People should actively reduce the amount of energy they use on a daily basis, refrain from using
plastic
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 bag if possible as well as recycling more. Everyone should be responsible and stop buying any products which may harm the
environment
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. In conclusion, both
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 and citizens should consider protecting the
environment
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 the top priority and act immediately to ensure the safety and wellbeing of our planet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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