Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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world population and economies, human beings have created enormous damages to the
environment
. Throughout
this
essay, I will discuss some of these damages created by people as well as how
government
and citizen can ease the situation.
To begin
with, many production factories and increasing use of motor vehicles are powered by
combustion
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of fossil fuels, which produced many harmful chemicals and pollutant gases during the burning process.
Moreover
, the
growing
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of consumer spending
also
rise the usage of
plastic
package material, it is undeniable that
the
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plastic
material will eventually turn into chemical harming the ecosystem.
Government
should be responsible to monitor and implement certain regulation in order to address the environmental problem.
For instance
, pollutant gas emissions from industries should be monitored closely and fine for exceeding the legal limit.
Moreover
, the
government
should encourage the citizen to use renewable power sources
such
as solar power and
battery powered
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vehicles. Alternatively,
government
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may improve the public transportation system and limiting the number of cars on the road by increasing
petrol
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tax.
On the other hand
,
plastic
bags or packing material should be banned
otherwise
put on higher charges for usage.
In addition
, more recycling facilities should be built nearby the residential building to encourage citizens to reprocess. Since the
government
may not be able
control
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the actions of all individuals, it is very important for all of us to play a part to protect the
environment
. People should actively reduce the amount of energy they use on a daily basis, refrain from using
plastic
bag if possible as well as recycling more. Everyone should be responsible and stop buying any products which may harm the
environment
. In conclusion, both
government
and citizens should consider protecting the
environment
the top priority and act immediately to ensure the safety and wellbeing of our planet.
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