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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is certainly true that in many parts of the developed world, it is good for the
country
 that a tiny number of individuals earn
super
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 high livelihood, while some
people
 tend towards the viewpoint that authorities should apply the salaries at a limit stage. In my point of view, I would have to support the idea that it is better that governments allow a finite stage of incomes. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that it is better for a
country
 to make a small rate of
people
 earn an enormous amount of salaries. One of the main reasons can be that it can increase the popularity of specific
feild
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field
 like agriculture
sector
 or sport
sector
, which means that it might lead the different sectors to deal with international and famous
busniesses
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businesses
business
 across the globe. Another reason can be that it can increase the productivity and the performance of the employees,
as a
result
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 their
bussiness
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business
feild
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field
 can have various transactions with vast
feilds
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fields
.
For instance
, some countries raise the
athelet's
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athlete's
athletes
 salaries because
sport
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sector
 has the major popularity in these countries.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to make the opposing case that in fact, some
people
 believe that governments should not conform
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 over
the
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 certain level.
People
 usually have
this
 opinion because they might see that all employees who work in any
sector
 should earn the same amount of money. Another reason can be that it may increase the profile of the
country
 and lead to a prosperous economy. A particularly good example here is that individuals who work in
medical
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sector
 and
touristic
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sector
 should earn
the
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 equal amount
of
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salary to save the
country
's economy. In conclusion, while
people
 may vary in their opinions, in my perspective, I think that
people
 should not earn
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 high level of incomes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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