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Nowadays, a lot of information about medical conditions and illnesses is freely available on the internet. Is this a good thing or a bad thing for most people? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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People can get a lot of things online about their medical problems or how to solve their illnesses. I think the drawbacks of
this
 outweigh the benefits. On the one hand, nowadays, technology has improved steadily. It means we can learn a lot of things about our
health
 on
internet
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. Giving an example, if one
have
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strong
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 headache and does not the reason
of
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this
, one can write the symptoms on
internet
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 and can get the reasons
of
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this
 issue, learn how to solve the headache.
On the other hand
, getting some information about our
health
 might a little bit awful for us.
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What
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 means
,
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 we cannot know that everything we read is true and useful. We cannot believe it.
For instance
,
last
 year, scientists have
proof
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 that the trust fullness of something about our
health
 on
internet
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 is 37.5%. So, if somebody
take
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 a medicine that recommended on
internet
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, it will probably be harmful
for
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to
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 his
health
.
Therefore
, we have to
be believe
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 only our
doctors
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doctor's
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 suggestions. To sum up,
although
 there are some advantages of learning something about our
health
, they are outweighed by disadvantages.
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