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Due to poorer countries experiencing a brain drain they are seeing many professionals, such as doctors and teachers leaving to work in more developing countries. What problem does this cause? What solutions can be suggested to deal with this solution?

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Recently, the skilled
workers
 from under developing
countries
 are migrated to developed
countries
 which leads to a major depletion of the workforce in that nation eventually it can collapse their economy in the aftermath. Even though it is considered a widespread disguise it can be resolved with some crucial solutions.                
To begin
 with, the professionals always thrive for a better future for their commitment and hard work, which can get attracted by western
countries
' policies. The main cause of the brain drain is fewer wages.
For instance
, 80 dollars a month is an average salary of a physician in Cuba, whereas in us it is more than thousands,
subsequently
, it affects the health care system in Cuba.
Such
 issues can be taken care of by improvising the salary to a universal standard.
Hence
 it can make the poor
countries
 keep their skilled job seekers in the nation.                
Furthermore
, the infrastructure and standard of living in underprivileged
countries
 are dissatisfactory,
therefore
 the qualified
workers
 would haunt for an outstanding placement in privileged cities around the globe which are engineered with excellent public services. The key solution for
this
 is to provide tax benefits for the high ranked employee, in the Middle East, the
workers
 with top grades got various subsidies in terms of bank loans with
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 interest rates, free education for the children, free access to the health care system and so on.                 To recapitulate, ensuring a promising future and providing world-class services are the key measures to confine experienced
workers
 in their home country which
consequently
 can boost the economy and can enhance the well-being of every citizen.
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