Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The rate of
crime
has been increasing for decades in every part of the World. Some Use synonyms
people
claim that the Use synonyms
crime
rates can decrease with the penalty of long Use synonyms
prison
judgements. Yet, some of them say that there are effective ways to reduce Use synonyms
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punishment. I am of the opinion that governments should implement some effective laws for criminals.
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prison
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for
offenders
to refrain from committing Use synonyms
crimes
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prison
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prison like
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also
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a deterrent
offenders
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crimes
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people
say that Use synonyms
instead
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prison
judgements, there are some ways to reduce Use synonyms
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people
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because many criminals who committed Use synonyms
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crime
rate can decrease thanks to Correct article usage
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offenders
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because these Use synonyms
seminars
raise their awareness about committing Use synonyms
crimes
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seminars
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crimes
affect human life.Use synonyms
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crime
like Use synonyms
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way
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people
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badly
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offenders
have family and friend issues. Thanks to these Use synonyms
seminars
, they can meet friends.In Use synonyms
this
way, socialization can be deterrent to commit Linking Words
crimes
because it gives good emotions.
To sum up, Some Use synonyms
people
think that long Use synonyms
prison
penalties can decrease the Use synonyms
crime
rates because of Use synonyms
people
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of
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for
However
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instead
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prison
government should attach importance to Use synonyms
offenders
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crimes
should be implemented by Use synonyms
government
like Add an article
the government
seminars
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