Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The rate of
crime
has been increasing for decades in every part of the World. Some people
claim that the crime
rates can decrease with the penalty of long prison
judgements. Yet, some of them say that there are effective ways to reduce crime
instead
of prison
punishment. I am of the opinion that governments should implement some effective laws for criminals.
It is believed that staying in prison
in
long years enables prospective Change preposition
for
offenders
to refrain from committing crimes
because they scare to stay in prison
. This
is because their freedom and comfortable area can be restrained in the prison like
doing nothing without permission. Add a hyphen
prison-like
For instance
, in the
turkey, many Correct article usage
apply
people
who stayed in prison
in the past say that ı attach importance to my behavior
in Change the spelling
behaviour
the
society because Correct article usage
apply
in
Add the comma(s)
,in
the
my Remove the article
apply
prison
sentence experience , we cannot go out without permission and also
we had no chance to choose our meals in normal
day. Add an article
a normal
This
situation can be deterrent
for many prospective Correct article usage
a deterrent
offenders
to commit crimes
for the sake of convenience and freedom.
On the other hand
, some people
say that instead
of prison
judgements, there are some ways to reduce crime
rate like rehabilitation Correct article usage
the crime
centers
. If Change the spelling
centres
people
recover psychologically, this
affects their behavior
well . Change the spelling
behaviour
Therefore
governments can implement some laws to enter these centers
for the Change the spelling
centres
offenders
because many criminals who committed crimes
have a psychological problems
. Correct the article-noun agreement
psychological problems
a psychological problem
Also
, if these problems can not be solved , they are predisposed to repeat their
bad Replace the word
they're
they are
behaviors
.These repeating Change the spelling
behaviours
crimes
which is
committed by Change the verb form
are
offenders
make up the
50% of the Correct article usage
apply
crime
rates in every part of the World. In this
way, staying in these centers
treat Change the spelling
centres
offenders
’ bad thoughts , and crime
rate can decrease thanks to Correct article usage
the crime
this
.
In my opinion, governments should regulate some incentive programs for the offenders
like seminars
because these seminars
raise their awareness about committing crimes
. Also
, these should be obligatory for participation. For instance
, the subject of these seminars
can explain how crimes
affect human life.For instance
, people
who are exposed to crime
like theft
can share their emotions and results about that.In Add an article
a theft
this
way
they can understand how to affect Add a comma
,way
people
’s lives badly
. Replace the word
worse
In addition
, many prospective offenders
have family and friend issues. Thanks to these seminars
, they can meet friends.In this
way, socialization can be deterrent to commit crimes
because it gives good emotions.
To sum up, Some people
think that long prison
penalties can decrease the crime
rates because of people
’ fond of
freedom and convenience.Change preposition
for
However
, some of them claim that instead
of prison
government should attach importance to offenders
’ psychological situation. In my opinion, raising awareness about crimes
should be implemented by government
like Add an article
the government
seminars
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