In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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governments should regulate
salaries
. While high
salaries
can benefit a
country
, namely due to a higher income from
taxes
, in my opinion, extremely high
salaries
should be banned because of the negative impact they could have on the stability of a society. On the one hand, high
salaries
equals
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high income from
taxes
. A
country
with a large number of workers earning high
salaries
will have more money to invest in education and health, and
this
way the society as a whole could benefit.
For example
, a large syndicate like Google might choose to pay millions of dollars each year to its CEO, and the high
taxes
from that salary can be invested in buying a computer for every student in every school across the
country
.
On the other hand
, high
salaries
can
also
mean more profound social gaps. If the difference between the minimum wage to the highest salary is significant, the gap between the various sectors of the society will surely grow and the
country
itself may become less stable.
For instance
, a poor man who earns minimum wage can act violently and start a riot if he understands that his salary is 100 times lower than a senior director in a big firm. In conclusion, it is argued by some that high
salaries
can benefit a
country
by enlarging
the
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its income from
taxes
. I strongly
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governmants
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governments
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should limit the amount of money people can earn, for the sake of social
stabilty
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