The best way to educate children is by using the internet in every lesson. To what extent do you share this opinion? What other ways are there of making lessons effective for children?

It is widely known that modern technologies are developed in almost every aspect, just as
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is proposed to be
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approach to educate young people in every lesson. I partially disagree with
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notion for several reasons and there are several possible alternatives to offer lessons more effectively. Perhaps, one of
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reasons is that the
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of
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affect negatively to
children
development due to that
such
technology not only lacks their intellectual ability but
also
may lead to addiction. It is assumed that,
for instance
, if
children
were addicted to access
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, they would rely on it to accomplish their works in every lesson.
Thus
,
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children
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be openly critical.
Furthermore
, the excessive use of
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brings about some health-related issues
such
as eye disorder and obesity. It might appear that
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these days, many
children
use thick-lensed glasses and deal with obesity at an early age which is likely
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effects of using
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. Regarding the possible alternatives, we could involve
children
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learning method which encourages
children
to learn
subjects
in more funny ways
such
as games, rule cards and puzzles. It might appear that
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this
approach could develop
children
’s ability and stimulate their brain to comprehend
subjects
practically.
In addition
, unlike
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that only shows information visually, recreational activity seems to be
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suitable alternative for
children
. Those activities
such
as school trip and study tour play an important role to support the
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comprehension
of
subjects
. To demonstrate
this
, introducing young people to museum and historical places presumably gives
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improvement of learning
subjects
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
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contributes negative impacts
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young
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generation considering their developments and health problems to be the most prominent goals.
Therefore
, several possible alternatives
such
as
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learning approach and recreational activities would bring
children
to learn every subject
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creative and
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effective ways.
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