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Some people think that technology makes life complex, so we should make our life simpler without using the technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that the
technology
 boom presents us
a
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 more complicated world.
As a result
, refusing to use
technology
 is believed to be the best way to make
life
 simpler. While I believe that
technology
 has led to
a
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complex
life
, I do not agree with the idea of getting rid of
technology
. It is undeniable that
technology
 makes
life
 more complicated in some cases. The advances in
technology
 are constantly offering a dramatic expansion in the number of choices. The information overload leads to confusion to users,
as
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.
For example
, the online media options are now almost endless, and they are offering entertainment, news, broadcasts, videos, and TV programs, many of which are free.
Therefore
, we have to make so many decisions about the content.
Furthermore
, elderly people have to take the trouble to learn how to use the
technology
 in order to keep up with the pace of modern
life
,
such
 as paying bills with mobile phone and making an online appointment to doctor, which are too difficult
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 them. Despite the complexity mentioned above, I do not believe that we make our
life
 simpler by getting rid of
technology
.
Firstly
,
technology
 brings us a more comfortable world than ever before. Compared with a few
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 ago, we can keep in touch with other people by emails or instant messenger services. Shop and other services are now available online which saves numerous time and energy.
Secondly
,
technology
 can make our work more efficient and easier, especially in areas that require high levels of accuracy, or some type of time-consuming jobs. In conclusion, it is not wise to reject the
technology
 for the complexity it brings to us,
instead
, We should keep up with the progress of
technology
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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