For some people, making a lot of money is an important goal. Others think that their free time is more important than wealth. Which is more important to you? Explain, giving specific reasons for your choice.

Nowadays many
people
live by one goal of making enormous money to live a comfortable life. Critics argue that free
time
is highly vital than wealth, while others and I believe the opposite.
This
essay will discuss the importance of making money in today's world
instead
of relaxing by using examples from Economic Daily Magazine and free
time
expenses.
To begin
with, many
people
in
this
day and age struggle to make ends meet when everything is surging in price. The ideal situation for any individual would be to have some free
time
, yet be financially stable.
However
, money-making is not feasible for many,
hence
people
work longer hours to sustain their lifestyle. To illustrate, according to Economic Daily Magazine in UK 4 out of 9 job types do not pay
people
well, which leaves many
people
working overtime with no
time
for
relaxation
. The results are shocking, as many do not earn a good income to take
time
out for
relaxation
. If hiring companies increase wages for employees, an individual would certainly consider taking some
time
out for
relaxation
. In my opinion, it is essential for humans to take some
time
out from hectic schedules, as one's health can be suffering.
However
the circumstances are not easy for everyone, even free
time
comes at a cost. Many
people
's idea of
relaxation
is not sitting at home, it is to go out for activities.
For example
, a spa session costs around £50 and a movie ticket £14 on average per person in the UK which is quite expensive as many
people
cannot afford
such
a lifestyle,
hence
free
time
becomes once in every few months occasion. To summarise from the aforementioned examples, it is highly vital for an individual to take some
time
out to destress ,
however
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it is not possible for many due to less paying jobs, and rising costs of living.

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