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Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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A certain section of the society thinks that a fresh expression needs to be made to deal with the foreign countrymen. The benefits of
this
 can surely outrun the drawbacks and the following paragraphs will exaggerate the propitious aspect of the aforementioned text and
thus
 will lead to a plausible conclusion.
To begin
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different population with dissimilar thinking and altogether unfamiliar tongue. The variety of speech in every part of the world change and so do the public, so it would be a great option to discover a new language. The conversation barrier can be removed by
this
 approach,
such
 as a multinational company wants to invest in a rural area in Africa, but coordinating the whole project can play a vital role in
this
 section.
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things pretty easy. To elaborate
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statistics from a credible source revealed that 47.2% of the big businesses who want to grow with the greater good are still stuck to their native places due to lingual tolls. Needless to say, all these merits stand in better stead as far as creating
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 accent familiar to every civilisation is concerned. Paradoxically, on the other side of the fence, another half argue that it would bring some drawbacks and will lead to arguments conversation.
Firstly
, leaving behind the culture is a big task,
such
 as the majority of the crowd of Asian countries truly worship their religion and their culture and don't need and have no intention to adopt to any foreign style.
Secondly
, learning a new way of speaking is surely not an easy subject and
moreover
, the latest edition of times magazine shows that in
this
 modernisation, the literacy rate is still 38.9% and coping with
this
 majority of community it will surely be a difficult approach.
Furthermore
, the one who advocates
this
 view of point fails to see the picture in a larger context. To recapitulate, after having a great dealing of thoughts and deliberation with myself, I hereby conclude that learning and getting knowledge is always for the betterment and learning
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 latest approach of speech can be a futuristic thought and leading it in the right direction is a positive aspect.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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