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Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

it is widely believed that being hard-working and strenuous will bring a successful
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 for humanity.While many people suppose that
money
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 and
appearance
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 are two more significant factors, I believe that the
determination
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 of each individual is the key to any rewards. On the one hand. There are a variety of reasons why
money
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 and
appearance
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 contribute to
success
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 in
life
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.
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, in terms of
money
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,
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 factor plays
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 an integral part in human
life
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. With a huge amount of
money
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, people could meet their basic needs
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 as being able to afford the latest version of a car, a desirable house or even going on a luxurious holiday.
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, with a good-looking
appearance
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, individuals would become more outstanding and attractive that enable them to be paid lots of attention and affection from society.
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, they would gain more confidence for some special occasions
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 as the day dating with whom they love. Both these elements so would help communication to have a good sense of
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 satisfaction or happiness.
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 can be defined as
success
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 that everyone is pursuing in
life
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.
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, I believe that with
determination
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 and enthusiasm, people could overcome
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difficult challenge and
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hard situation in order to gain any rewarding achievements in
life
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.
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, the legendary footballer, Cristiano Ronaldo, by his considerable effort regardless of all poor conditions, now is one of the best football stars around the world that brings him to countless achievements and the
success
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 and reputation of an incredible
life
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.
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, even haven't reached any rewards, individuals with their respectful
determination
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 will never have a feeling of regretting what they have tried so hard to achieve.
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 is an essential lesson and a valuable motivation to encourage society to work hard again until they gain a truly successful
life
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. in conclusion both
money
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,
appearance
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 and
determination
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 are indispensable elements for
success
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 but I believe that the shortest way leading to
success
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 is the effort and
determination
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 of individuals

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