Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the era of modernization, many opine that
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have become more dependant on one another whereas others say that the world is getting more independent. In
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essay, I will discuss both the view and share my opinion in upcoming paragraphs. Some
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advocate that we have become more dependent on each other in
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modern era. Globalization might be the
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reason behind
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matter.
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especially in the workplace , promotes and increases interaction between different regions and populations around the globe.
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, the inflation rate has been increasing rapidly, which leads to
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in
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the prices of utilities and mortgages. Most parents are hiring baby sitters or asking their relatives or grandparents to take care of their child and
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is because it is not enough to cover the cost of their standard living,
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as children's school fees, and food if only one parent is working.
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, I think that we are more independent with the help of the internet and those around us. There
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more and more
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staying connected in their homes using mobiles, laptops and so on, they have been more isolated in comparison with the period before the internet.
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, as the internet gives everything you need at the time you need it is possible to say that
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do not rely on each other.
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, using Facebook, Linkedin and all other social media make
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way
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from each other due to lack of physical interaction despite they are texting all day long and sharing information which does not mean that
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person
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another person. To sum up, while some of us say that we seem to be more dependent on each other,
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believe that in modern life, we got enough supports
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helping us to become more and more independent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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