Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the era of modernization, many opine that
people
have become more dependant on one another whereas others say that the world is getting more independent. In
this
essay, I will discuss both the view and share my opinion in upcoming paragraphs. Some
people
advocate that we have become more dependent on each other in
this
modern era. Globalization might be the
first
reason behind
this
matter.
This
especially in the workplace , promotes and increases interaction between different regions and populations around the globe.
Secondly
, the inflation rate has been increasing rapidly, which leads to
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the prices of utilities and mortgages. Most parents are hiring baby sitters or asking their relatives or grandparents to take care of their child and
this
is because it is not enough to cover the cost of their standard living,
such
as children's school fees, and food if only one parent is working.
On the other hand
, I think that we are more independent with the help of the internet and those around us. There
being
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more and more
people
staying connected in their homes using mobiles, laptops and so on, they have been more isolated in comparison with the period before the internet.
In other words
, as the internet gives everything you need at the time you need it is possible to say that
people
do not rely on each other.
For instance
, using Facebook, Linkedin and all other social media make
people
way
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from each other due to lack of physical interaction despite they are texting all day long and sharing information which does not mean that
this
person
depends
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ondepends

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another person. To sum up, while some of us say that we seem to be more dependent on each other,
i
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believe that in modern life, we got enough supports
that is
helping us to become more and more independent.

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