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The movement of people from villages to cities for work can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? What measures can be taken to to solve these problems?

Industrialisation
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The industrialisation
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 of cities has caused an increase in
rural urban
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rural-urban
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 migration which has resulted in various
problems
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 as overpopulation in the city and depopulation of
villages
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 but there are ways these issues can be tackled.
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 essay will discuss the negative consequences of rural exodus and possible solutions to these
problems
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. One major problem associated with
rapid
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the rapid
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 movement of
people
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 into the cities is overpopulation. As more
people
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 leave the
villages
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 in search of greener pastures , the city becomes densely populated with resultant air, land, noise and water pollution and
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 is known to cause various health challenges for
people
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 living in these areas. Lagos
state
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 for example has become the most populous state in Nigeria due to
high
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the high
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 influx of
people
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 into the state, leading to environmental
problems
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.
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 to
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, there is an increase in
crime
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the crime
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 rate,
as
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a
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majority
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the majority
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 of migrants are stranded in the cities with no
jobs
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,
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, they resort to crimes for survival. The rural area is not left out, as a consequence of
people
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 leaving the
villages
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, it becomes depopulated and deserted. The few
people
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 left in the
villages
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 are mostly elderly persons, some of
which
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 are no more productive in the society,
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result
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 cannot contribute positively to the growth of the village.
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, these rural areas may be abandoned by potential investors, as there are no youths in these places to help foster development.
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, there are a number of possible solutions to these issues.
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, the government should create better lives for rural dwellers by providing basic amenities
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 as electricity, hospitals, good schools and housing, as it will help curtail the number of
people
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 leaving the
villages
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.
Secondly
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,
jobs
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 should be created for youths because when everyone is engaged, they will have no time to be involved in crimes.
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finally
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 individuals can
also
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 create
jobs
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 for themselves through skills acquisition rather than waiting for
government
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the government
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 to provide
jobs
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.
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, recent evidence has shown that unemployment has been reduced by 60% through
self employment
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self-employment
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. In conclusion,
although
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rural urban
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rural-urban
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 migration creates a number of
problems
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such
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 as overpopulation and
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an
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increase
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 in crime rate, solutions are available to tackle these issues.

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