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The movement of people from the villages to the cities for work can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? what measures can be taken to solve this problem?

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The industrialisation of municipalities has led to an increase in the
number
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 of persons migrating from rural to urban areas in search
for
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of
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 greener pastures.
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 has led to serious problems
such
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 as
over population
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overpopulation
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, but there are a
number
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 of solutions available to tackle it.
This
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 essay will discuss the causes of
rural urban
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rural-urban
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 migration and profer solutions to it. One negative effect of rural exodus is
over population
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overpopulation
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 of the urban areas. As more people leave the villages to the cities,the
number
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 of people in the metropolis increases and
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 population explosion occurs. Lagos
state
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 has become the most populous state in Nigeria due to the high influx of people into the state, resulting in several environmental problems
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 as air, land and noise pollution from industrial and human activities,
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 affecting health negatively.
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, there is an increase in
crime
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 rate, as most urban dwellers are unemployed, a lot of them resort to illegal activities
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 as stealing and cybercrime.
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, there are ways of tackling
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 situation.
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, the government can alleviate
this
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 problem by making life better for those in the rural areas through
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provision of basic amenities like hospitals, schools, potable water and electricity, and
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 by making sure these are available for all, as it will help curtail the
number
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 of persons trying to leave their present locations in search for better ones.
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, jobs should be created for all citizens, because, when everyone is engaged, it will drastically reduce
crime
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the crime
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 rate in the cities.
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, individuals can
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 learn a skill for themselves, so they can earn a living without support from
government
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the government
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. In conclusion,
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 problems of overpopulation and increase in crime rate are common in the cities due to rural depopulation, the government can tackle these pitfalls by creating a better environment for
her
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its
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 citizens to thrive.

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