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Nowadays, people prefer to live and work anywhere they want because of the improvement in transportation and technology. Discuss the benefits and drawbacks of this.

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In recent times, life
have
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 been a lot easier owing to the advancement in science and technology. Individuals can now choose to reside and
work
 from any destination.
This
 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 development. One positive effect of deciding to live and
work
 from
any where
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 in the world is the meaningful experience acquired through it. Those living outside their hometown, have the opportunity to learn about other peoples culture,
their
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language and beliefs.
For instance
, Nigerians residing in the United Kingdom have been able to see and enjoy the other side of life,
such
the
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as the
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 snow and various delicacies available over there,
thus
, expanding their horizons.
This
 wouldn't have been possible if there were no aeroplanes to transport people to the Country.
Also
, with the advent of smartphones and computers, it is now possible to
work
 from the comfort of our homes and get paid.
For example
,
rescent
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recent
 evidence suggests that 60% of the world's working population were able to maintain their jobs during the peak of the
corona virus
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 pandemic because they were able to
work
 from homes using their systems.
However
, there are
also
 negative consequences accompanying
such
 development.
Firstly
, one may face
descrimination
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discrimination
 in a strange land . A lot of persons working outside their communities encounter
such
 situations and are being treated unfairly because they don't understand the language of the people and due to their skin colour.
As a result
, may find it difficult
securing
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a
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better
work
 over there.
In addition
 , they may find it difficult to adapt to their new environment and
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weather conditions of the new location. In conclusion,
although
 it is now possible to migrate
to
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anywhere in the world due to technologies, there are
also
 problems encountered in a strange land.
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