Teenagers should never be put in the same prison with adults no matter how serious their crime is. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Nowadays, young persons are involved in a
lot
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crimes in
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society which warrants a jail term. It has been suggested that they should not be put in the same cell as
grown ups
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for certain reasons and I completely agree with
this
opinion.
This
Essay will discuss why these two groups of persons should not be locked together. Teenagers should not be confined in
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area
adults
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in a correctional facility for several reasons.
Firstly
, they may get abused and assaulted in the prison,
this
is
due to
the fact that when older inmates are kept with younger people, they feel a sense of superiority and may begin to abuse the little ones. For
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example, a case like
this
was reported in a prison in Nigeria, where a
nineteen years old
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boy was beaten to
coma
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by
adults
in the same space for refusing to wash their clothes.
In addition
, some of them end up getting molested sexually which would not have been so if they had separate rooms.
Secondly
, a lot of teenagers may come down with behavioural problems if allowed to stay with people above their age group, because some may end up picking bad habits and learn antisocial behaviours from these
adults
and may even come out from jail worse than how they went it.
For instance
, studies in the past decades have revealed that
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about 70% of youths who were convicted came out worse than they were before going to jail,
as a result
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society, continues to suffer.
Also
, some of them have reported being cajoled by these persons into engaging in practices
such
as smoking. In conclusion, I think it is safer and wiser for prisons to have different cells for
adults
and youths.
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