It is argued that the happiest moment of a person's
is during youth, while others deny that it is happened in
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adulthood even have to carry more duties. In my opinion, I agree with the happiest moments are happening in the adult lifetime.
with, it can understand that the reason people think they gained most of their happiness is in the youth. As being a teenager,
is comfortable and receive all-around protection from the family and the school.
, young people only need to focus on their study and be good student, and the rest part of
pressure they have no responsibility to carry.
, many students were suffering in
due to extremely studying schedules as early morning to night tutoring classes without private time.
, the students carry the heaviest responsible is a huge amount of expectation from their parents and teachers.
On the other hand
, from a part of a family member to become an independent unit as being an adult has to carry many duties,
, which brings more joy into the
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to decide the
pattern and arrange their own time.
, the greater responsibilities can boost
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to achieve a better goal, especially when having a marriage.
the daily expense costs quite higher the smile on a family member is priceless as a sweet burden.
In conclusion, despite the teenage livelihood is simple and joyful but nothing better than adulthood
have more freedom and choice to gain more
experience in the world.