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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online.

#people #individuals #companies
The issues of online shopping effects on people have been raising a lot of debates. Some might say that
companies
 have more benefits than individuals and earn more profits when selling
products
 on online networking sites.
On the contrary
, others insist on the opinion that it is some negative impacts on the buyer for shopping
such
 as the low quality of delivered equipment. Viewing from general perspectives,
this
 essay will discuss both viewpoints and I personally follow the former opinion by following reasons.
To begin
 with,
companies
 take advantages of business online.
Firstly
, they can easily advertise and connect their product to customers all over the world through online websites or app
instead
 of spending cost to operate stores in other countries.
For example
, many
products
 of Vietnam
companies
 are sold on Amazon which is a popular worldwide site nowadays.
Secondly
, online business will help
companies
 save more expense for shipment, renting a house or hiring employees so that their cash flow are been increasing and they
also
 earn more profits.
For instance
,  Shoppee have policies of supporting the delivery expense for seller
such
 as free of shipping which will be the most attractive element in order to have more buyer.
Finally
, payment instruments of online shopping are diverse
that
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 customers have many ways to pay the
goods
such
 as by cash or credit card.
On the other hand
, some individuals are received
low quality
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goods
 which do not similar to the showed
products
 on online websites and the purchased
products
 might to not fit with the customer because they can not try them
such
 as shoes or clothes .
Moreover
, it takes more time to exchange and return the defective product for the buyer.
However
, many online websites will
also
 have promotion or discount if the customer buys the
goods
next
 time. In conclusion, we can not deny the benefits of online shopping sites to
the
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commercial businessman for distributing
goods
 and services to customers.
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