IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

#numbers #students #study #trend #benefit #countries
Education nowadays has been expanding and people are becoming more aware of the foreign education system and
this
 has increased the trend among
students
 to
study
 abroad for better guidance.
This
 essay will outline the benefits and drawbacks of choosing to
study
 abroad On one hand, Studying abroad has become easier for
students
 who are securing good grades as per the criteria of the foreign universities . The Indian statistic shows that more than 60% of
students
 in India are studying abroad
this
 benefits both scholars as well the countries . To illustrate, the graduate who
want
Change the verb form
wants
show examples
 to learn new skills upgrade themself want to know more about the global market . By studying abroad they
also
 contribute to the countries economy which leads to bringing foreign companies to fund . As a , a result they can easily become global marketers and can earn huge amount of money
On the other hand
,
There
Correct your spelling
there
show examples
 are some demerits associated with
this
 not everyone can afford to
study
 in a different country . The cost of living abroad is very expensive .
However
 , Different culture and languages can
also
 be difficult to understand. To illustrate , It is difficult for
students
 to understand the native language the accent , the tone of the native speaker
this
 creates a language barrier.
Moreover
, As they are spending
an
Change the article
a
show examples
 lot
money
Change preposition
of money
show examples
 on education and have debts to pay .
Thus
 they work hard to find a part-time job or a full-time job to
Add an article
the
show examples
speedy recovery of the amount spent In conclusion ,
Although
 many undergraduate wishes to
study
 abroad for enhancing their skills, and to enter the global market they
also
 have to come across many challenges
such
 as culture, languages, paying huge amount of money which have to recover in due course time
Submitted by ayesha221199 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: