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Some people believe that it is wrong for professional athletes to compete in the Olympics because their strong financial backing and training give them an unfair advantage over the other athletes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people that professional athletes have advantages due to their training so they should not compete in Olympics. I
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 agree with
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 because
profeesional
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professional
professionals
 have been through better training and
aware
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 of the practices to win the
game
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.
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,
professionals
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 are trained and received proper guidance from the trainers. To be perfect at something it is mandatory to get training which these
professionals
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 are already taken. Competition should be between those who are equally trained but these
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 are
are
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over qualified
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 than others.
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unfair
practise
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practice
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 if these
professionals
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 compete with beginners.
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, a professional athlete
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 under
training
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 several years which other participants do not get.
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, they are not as guided as
professionals
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.
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, these
professionals
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 are completely
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to
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 the techniques to win the
game
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. These are
professionals
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 and known to the tacts.
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game
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the game
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, there are
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which
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 can be used for victory. Because these are playing
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 a number of years, they can easily use these techniques and beat the other candidates.
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, they know where to speed up and where to slow down. These things help them to win easily from the non-
professionals
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.
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, it is better if they do not take part in these. In conclusion,
professionals
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 are in advantage as they are guided and been through the required
trainings
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training
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. They are aware of all the techniques which
helps
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 them to win the
game
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. I
also
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 believe
,
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 they have
benefits
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 than
other candidate
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another candidate
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 so they should not take part in Olympics.
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