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Each year, the crime rate increase. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity.

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each year, the
crime
 rate rises considerably that raising more concerning problems for the quality of human life. There are several
reasons
 for these problems and various measures could be taken by governments and individuals. There are some
reasons
 why the
crime
 rate has experienced a significant increase recently. The main issue is that along with the development of high technology devices and smart automatic machines, a huge quantity of qualified and skilled workforce is gradually replaced leading to a rapid increase of the unemployment rate. These jobless workers are put in
such
 poor conditions that they now have no salaries and rewards in order to take care of their families and have to implement lots of illegal trading relating to drug or stimulants to live on day by day.Another reason is that the deprivation of educational programs will result in the lack of awareness and cognition of
people
 to have a positive behaviour and attitude towards society.These
reasons
 why the number of
people
 kept in prison grows considerably to take their responsibilities for a series of informal actions with communication. Fortunately, several measures could be taken to prevent
this
 problem.
Firstly
, governments and authorities should create more opportunities of job for the jobless by proposing training vocational courses.
For example
, my uncle has established a factory referring to the fishery industry and introduced a thousand
people
 out of work to be experts in
this
 field.
This
 solution has kept lots of
people
 from being a dangerous
crime
such
 as thieves or drug addicts in my hometown.
Secondly
, for the more objective measure, governments must promulgate
such
 a rigorous policy and an appropriate punishment to deter the civilians not to have the wrong perspective in their mind. In conclusion, it is clear that there are various
reasons
 for the growth of
crime
 percentage and steps need to be taken to tackle
this
 problem
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