Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The issue of people thinking that wild
animals
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should not be kept in
zoos
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has risen a lot of debate.
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, others believe that there are good reasons for having
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. On the one
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wild
animals
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should have the right as humans to live in their natural habitat, but
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it could be a danger both for individuals and for them to live in crowded places. In the following
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I will discuss both
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of views.
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, it is crucial to be aware of the fact that
animals
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should be considered as human beings
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because they are born and will grow up in
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world.
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, they
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are part of our planet and should have the right to live in their natural habitat.
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, wild
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require specific climate conditions to survive and
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they cannot be held in
zoos
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around the world, where the climatic requirements are not met.
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Elephants should live in Savanas, where they can eat the right food and grow up in their appropriate living conditions.
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, others believe that wild
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could only cause danger and
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should be kept in
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, where they can be controlled and used as an attraction. The main reason for keeping wild
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in
zoos
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is to benefit from their uniqueness and rareness.
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, a lot of rare wild
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such
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as Hippos are held in
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to
perserve
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preserve
their species.
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, in my
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wild
animals
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should be
sourrounded
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surrounded
by nature and be free to evolve their species without the control and influence of humans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • captivity
  • natural habitat
  • artificial enclosures
  • genetic diversity
  • animal welfare
  • conservation efforts
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • education platform
  • breeding programs
  • reintroduction
  • psychological suffering
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