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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. -Comics -Books -Radio -Television -Film -Theatre

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Propelling
information
 is not a challenging task in
this
 advanced technological era, where multiple mediators are being used to convey messages. When compared to each other they have some pros and cons which need to be considered before using them.
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 will
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comics
,
radio
, and films and present one
media
 that I believe is the best communicator in a subordinate paragraph. Admittedly, these
information
 tools are
great
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a great
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 way to get to the audience as these have won
hearts
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 of
masses
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the masses
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 according to
there
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 markets.
Firstly
,
comics
 are most
favorited
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 by children because these are
source
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 of amusement along with important learning skills.
Secondly
, commuting adults are so much addicted to listening to the
radio
, which aids them to pass the time on way and get
latest
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 news without giving it separate hours.
Lastly
, films are a sigh of relief for those who are juggling
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hectic schedules. They appreciate spending time and money watching those movies which get them some fresh content. To instantiate, in India there are several
comics
 and movies about freedom fighters who are often being discussed
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radio
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. Paradoxically, these
media
 sources do broadcast some negative content
which
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 is neither useful nor reliable. In
case
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 of children irrelevant and vulgar topics are not acceptable, but
media
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 does show it in
comics
that is
 why these must be selected carefully. After that,
radio
 shows are meant to give some
information
 where advertising seems too annoying.
Furthermore
, moviegoers are taking reel life personally and is not making logical decisions about their life and spending so much money on fashionable clothes. To exemplify,
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 survey conducted in Pune, India, families have been found breaking owing to the detrimental impact of
media
. To sum up, albeit
media
 is the only way that
connect
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 people to worldwide
information
, it
need
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 some sort of surveillance by high authorities so that it is used with proper care while reaching out to individuals.
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