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Nowadays people have greater access to fast food Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Fast
food
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cafes
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 have gained huge popularity over the recent decades and became more available than restaurants or conventional
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.
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 many
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 might find
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 trend as positive, I believe it is a cause for arising problems with health. The only benefit of fast
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 is that it saves time spent consuming a meal. Today most
people
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 can barely find time for their
food
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 because their busy time schedules do not allow them to escape from their jobs for long period,
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 society has turned to fast
food
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 as an optimum solution for
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 problem.
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, it is much more affordable to have a meal in fast
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cafes
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 than in restaurants.
People
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 tend to go to
cafes
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 where costs on the menu are much lower and fast-
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cafes
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 are a perfect choice for
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 case.
On the other hand
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, fast
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 products may come with tremendous harmful effects, which easily overweight their advantages. These
cafes
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 propagate unhealthy lifestyle to their target audience. Most of their meals may be tasty, yet they are harmful to the health.
People
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 consuming fast
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 meal for long period may end up having obesity issues or some other type of illnesses. Another point to consider is that fast
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 consumption stimulates an addiction to
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 junk
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. Most western societies have already proved that eating fast
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 products in big amounts may cause a person to adapt to
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 an unhealthy lifestyle and later to be unable to restrict its quantity. To conclude, eating fast
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 products may become a reason for countless health issues.
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, it is always better for
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 to cut off in these meals and switch to a healthy diet.

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