nowadays, people are spending increasingly large amount of money on their marriage parties. many people feel large and expensive wedding causes problems for bride and groom. do you agree?

Some people believe that
money
that spent on the big fat marriages is waste and cause problems to
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married couple. I
srongly
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strongly
agree
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this
, their
future
become
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less secure and
this
cause
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the social evil and
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of Dowry.
Firstly
, their
future
is not that secure as
this
should be.
Money
that is
spent on the expenses of marriages
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could
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saved for their
future
life.
This
could be invested in bonds, securities and properties. They are going to start a new family, they need
money
for their
future
children. If
this
money
is not spent rampantly,
this
could secure their children education too.
Money
is a big investment
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should be invested smartly. Securing the
future
is
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than
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a big
weeding
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wedding
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.
For instance
, couples who spend less on
this
day, live a better life ahead.
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,
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of marriages
cause
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an
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unsecured
insecure
future
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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