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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT UNIFORM AT SCHOOL IS UNNECESSARY AND SHOULD BE BANNED. TO WHT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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It is often believed that
school
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uniform
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 not required and a ban should be imposed on wearing them. I disagree with
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 point of view and counter
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 argument in the following paragraphs.
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 with, wearing a
uniform
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 is vital for student' cohesion and it should be made compulsory in every
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.
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 is because it develops a sense of unity among
students
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 that came from different backgrounds. Since pupils have to follow the same dress code, there would be no discrimination based on their financial status.
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 there are fewer cases of bullying in schools where
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 is made compulsory as compared to those schools where
students
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 have their own dress choices.
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, the latter
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's
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 from poor families often face problems
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 as peer pressure.
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, when the
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 is enforced by educational institutions, it may help staff to differentiate
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 from outsiders.
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 is to say, from a security point of view, it will be easy for staff members to locate intruder in case of any incident.
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this
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, wearing a
uniform
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 is of paramount importance because it
prepare
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students
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 for the corporate world.
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, wearing
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 help
students
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 to remain tidy and it will eventually assist them when they join services
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 as the medical field and armed forces where usually a
uniform
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 is a must. In conclusion,
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 it is argued by some individuals that wearing
uniform
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 at
school
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 is not required, I believe that it should be made compulsory so that
students
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 do not face discrimination and identified easily by staff;
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, it may help them when they enter the industry.

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