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Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening. What government can do to reduce the amount of rubbish produce?

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As the population is increasing nowadays it
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 giving incline to the
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 which is become more and more
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this
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 is happening due to our own carelessness . ,
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 I believe that
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 should spread awareness of
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 rising issue and take some necessary actions. On one hand, According to the University of Cambodia the Southern West, in 2016 according to the
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 every country produce more than 80% of the
rubbish
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 of their population in 3 months which means there is more
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 than the population on the planet . There are some countries that are very well successful to tackle
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 and make their environment a better place .
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 , A country like Singapore ranks the on 1st place for environmental awareness which includes
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 it is a small country other nations can amply the same methods and make the world a better place
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 ,
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 should motivate people to go plastic-free and
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 as today's young generation is very much enthusiastic about the planet .
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 should provide them with basic necessity so that among every 10 people there will be at least 6 people who will take actions against the
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 we are creating . To illustrate ,
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 can come up with automatic machines from which we will be able to differentiate
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 from the garbage
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 we should run the campaign about going plastic-free . We not only produce
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 we
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 make the air toxic which we are breathing .
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 , if
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 take all necessary action and spread awareness through
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society we will be able to decline the production of
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 In conclusion,
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 the
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 should take the responsibility for reducing the
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 . we as individuals should
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 take little actions from our end
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