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you have seen an advertisment from a couple, who live in australia, for someone to teach their two children your leguage for a year. write a letter to the couple. in your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasone for wanting the job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding the advertisement about teaching Spanish that you have on Gumtree. My name is Gonzalo Ezequiel Fuentes I am 29 years old from Argentina.
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 I would like to talk about my background, I have a Diploma in language and actually, I am working as a primary language teacher, since I have graduated from university I always have the idea to move to Australia to have a new life experience and now I think it is the perfect occasion.
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, as a former teacher, I could teach your children Spanish, but
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 I could help them
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 other assignments,
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 as math and history.
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, on weekends I could take the kids to the beach a teach them how to surf, which is one of my passions.
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 but not least, I think
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 would be a perfect opportunity for me to explore Australia and have a wonderful life experience which is something that I always dreamed of since I finished university. I hope you consider my application, yours faithfully. Gonzalo Fuentes
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coherence cohesion
In the first paragraph, ensure you clarify the purpose of your letter immediately to grab the reader's attention.
task achievement
Provide a little more detail about your language teaching experience and any specific methods you could use to teach the children.
coherence cohesion
The closing of the letter is polite and professional, creating a good impression.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and expresses enthusiasm for both the job and the opportunity to experience a new culture.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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