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More and more people work at home and study at home with the development of computer technology do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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It is true that the Internet has become an important part of modern life, Telecommuting, which means working from home with the help of telephone lines, and, online and distance education have become very common.
This
 situation has both, advantages as well as disadvantages. The most important benefit is that it saves time and money for employees and students. They do not need to waste time going and coming from work or college. They save on the fare
also
. What is more, they can set their own timetable of task and study. On top of that, the nation finds more time for their hobbies and family commitments.
This
 situation
also
 benefits the physically challenged and those living in remote areas. You can get online education from any university in any part of the world and you can struggle for any office in any corner of the world. So, technology has given birth to many opportunities for many public for whom none existed earlier. In
this
 ,since it is narrowing the bridge between the rich and the poor. Another big advantage is to the environment. As less community have to move out of their homes, less petrol and diesel is used and less pollution is caused. Traffic congestion, which is a big problem in the cities, is
also
 lessened. We all know that at peak hours, traffic moves at a snail's pace because of which crowd are forced to slow down the tempo of life even in
this
 fast-paced world. On the negative side, there is a decrease in face-to-face communication, which is isolating us socially. Working alone from home can be very boring at times. When you are in a proper office, there is an effort atmosphere, which keeps you going.
Moreover
, I do not think it is possible for a computer to be as effective as a real teacher. Many jobs and subjects involve physical action.
For example
, it would not be possible to study dance or drama without contact with others. If everybody worked and studied from home, imagine how unhealthy and lazy they would become. Summing up, technology has eased our life in many ways and
this
 is both a negative as well as a positive development but the whole the positive side outweighs the negative side.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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