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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of the argument and then give your opinion.

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Using a computer in education has become increasingly a controversial topic among most of the demographic in
this
 society.It is often argued that there is a huge amount of advantage available in
this
 trend whilst others disagree and think there is a negative outcome in it .I am with the
first
 side
To begin
 with, in
this
 modern generation computers is being used widely in School colleges .there are lots of conveniences available in artificial intelligence since they made learners soul easier than ever before as computer can do repetitive and time-consuming tasks efficiently ,
moreover
 student can
also
 be able to collect knowledge regarding various kinds of stuff by using it in their academic,for ,example a recent study indicates that teenagers who utilize smart devices for their education do great in their heart even some individuals are able to get a satisfying job in near future because they are highly skilled in
this
 platform from the very beginning,
furthermore
 they will
also
 able to mitigate their cruxes in early growth by just using smart devices.
On the other hand
 , even though some devices are life-changing but they
also
 have some bad influence on human lives
thus
 computer
also
 has some negative side .
Firstly
 as
this
 piece of things are utilizing by a gazillion of students they frequently damage their eye side which is hazardous for the youth generation,for ,instance research indicates that at least 78% of teenagers lose their eye power just for
this
 dangerous blue light ,
moreover
 they often lack privacy because these smart products are not authentic all the time .
although
 they are very beneficial for us, they
also
 take significant stuff from us . To conclude . I would say everything has some positive or negative impact on lives but in
this
 ,case advantage outweighs disadvantage clearly.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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